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So we’re at the end of this scene and there isn’t much to say about this page besides its simplicity. It was tough to conclude this scene because I didn’t have enough photos to close it out the way I wanted to and decided to throw in the really big panel with Jillian in it — which is a really great looking picture by the way. This was the second scene shot on the first day of shooting and I had finally figured out in that photo that I had my ISO setting up WAY TOO HIGH on my camera earlier in the day! So I adjusted it to a much better level and was able to take great pics for the rest of the day. I almost felt inclined to reshoot the exam scene but decided against it. Big lesson learned there.
You might not notice it but the first panel I had to splice two photos together just to get both Martha and Jillian to be in the same panel. It’s always the effects you add that aren’t even noticed that are the best effects! :) Stay tuned folks!
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December 15th, 2008 at 11:12 am
Cisco, I just caught up on everything and wanted to give you some feedback. Please keep an open mind about this, because, as a fellow web-comic artist, I want to be honest with you.
I like the plot and characterizations - some people might say ghosts and aliens is too much, but if it’s all in the world of paranormal, why not?
The photography isn’t bad, but there are some scenes you may want to reshoot - they look posed. Particularly bad is the scene of you. The next time you go unlock your car, consider where both of your hands are as you unlock the door. When someone comes up behind you, do you stand there, or do you turn to see them? It all seems too static and makes the scene feel unreal.
Also, if Professor Bateman is really trying to test Jillian’s psychic ability, you may want to pick up (or make) some Zener cards. The gag with the Uno card is great, and helps mark him as a non-traditionalist, but the regular playing cards throw the tinfoil-hat-wearing segment of your readership for a loop. Since your “show” fulfills 2 of the 3 major requirements for that segment’s interest, it’s probably a good idea to cater to them a little more. Of course, if the guy really is a sham, we should have more indication of that (not caring about the money would be a good ‘tell’ that he more than just a professor).
The dialogue is inconsistent, leaving some holes. In the beginning, you have Jillian correcting someone else’s spelling, then later on, try to establish that she’s a horrible speller. One or the other, or give us some reason to understand the inconsistency. Also, the last couple of pages of Jillian’s dialogue has been very stilted and unnatural, making it exceedingly hard to believe.
Anyway - keep up the good work, and don’t get discouraged by my review. It’s just one person’s opinion, after all.
December 15th, 2008 at 2:39 pm
I’m not so into critting, especially someone I don’t know or someone who hasn’t asked for a crit. This is your baby, and I either like it or I don’t. That isn’t to say that critting is wrong. It’s just not my bag.
I do. Alot. And I normally HATE photocomics. I’m amazed how well you pull the whole thing off. I think the photoshop filters certainly help make the images look less stiff and posed, but I also think you have a great eye for layout.
I’d suggest changing nothing, as you seem to have a solid vision and an apparent skill to flesh it out.
Thank you for a very entertaining read.
December 16th, 2008 at 8:42 pm
First off Cisco, I throughly enjoy your comic and storytelling thusfar. I’m a webcomic fan (have been for years) and while I agree with Chip in that I usually am not a big fan of photo comics, yours has caught my attention. Great job!
Among the many things I do, I m a consultant for screen writers, novelists and other storytellers. I do “critting”, but only when asked. My small reply to “Snicker” above, and encouragement to you Cisco, is that every artist (of any genre or medium) starts a bit rocky. It’s the way things go and expected. Over time you will no doubt learn many other tips, tricks and things which become a part of your unique style. Your audience is there, no matter how you develop your style. I highly recommend that you tell your story the way your passion would have you tell it, and let your audience figure themselves out.
It wont be long before you have regulars and they will love the style that only YOU can bring to your story.
With that said, take what parts of “Snickers” review you think can help you, and discard the rest… Do the same with anything I say or anyone else says. It’s the only way to stay true to your vision.
Again, you’re doing a great job, and I look forward to seeing more.
~Prince Demitri
December 17th, 2008 at 12:34 pm
Wow!
I really liked your story. Cant wait untill I can read more^^
It’s fun that it’s pictures of real people for a change….
Maby you will make it in to a movie some day ^^
December 18th, 2008 at 4:52 pm
Hey Cisco. I’ve caught up with the comic and I love it. Great work so far and I know it will be great moving on. It’s so easy to tell that you are passionate about your story and artistic abilities, and that what makes for excellent story-telling and future success. I’m very happy to see that you are having fun and doing what you love, ever since those comics in high school. (Could I get a copy of that one with me in it? lol) Life has a crazy way of leading you to where you need to be, but after all the strife, hardships and things lost, you have managed to develop into a true artist and I am certain that it will only go uphill from here. Let me know if you ever need my help.
December 19th, 2008 at 1:22 pm
Thanks for the comments everyone!
@ Bonnie: Are you talking about my Gopherball Z comic? I think that’s on my old website. E-mail me and I’ll give you a link.
@ Prince Demetri and Chip: I feel pretty much exactly the same way about most photocomics in general. My goal really is to change the stigma associated with photocomics and raise the bar. It’s good to know that I’m slowly changing people’s opinions or at least getting their attention!
@ Snicker: Thanks for the comment! It’s a sad truth that a lot gets lost in translation from a filming script to a comic book script so I can understand where you can sense that there’s more to a scene. A lot has been sacrificed for time and page limitations — characters have even been eliminated. Also, since I wasn’t behind the camera during my scene and I made the best out of the shots I got — there’s even a continuity error in there. Oh, and scheduling re-shoots with actors you aren’t paying much in the middle of a recession isn’t worth it at this point.
The next time I re-shoot any of this will be for film or television! 
As far as Jillian’s character goes… You’ve got to learn about this quirky character! Pay very close attention to the commentary for the upcoming Christmas Special! (Oh! The spelling gag was supposed to be a joke against her character — again, something else that would come off A LOT better in live action.)